I was just re-reading some old chapters.  Even the newest Archangel chapter had major problems with it, but this is...  yuck.

The thing with my writing is it's either really, really good or really, really bad.  I'm learning I need to slow down, use more adjectives, and try to condense the dialogue into larger blocks than just one line.  And I need to start describing emotions a bunch more.  And read this shit out loud.

At least the spelling and grammar is good...